Monday, 5 November 2012

A White Picket Fence



At dVerse Poetics today the prompt was to write a poem on one of the pictures shown by SueAnn of which I chose the picture shown.


Soldiers standing 
in a row to attention
or was it a white picket fence
diminished in colour
yet glowing so the eye catches
the brilliance of the sun
and purple hues glint
just a hint

Then in a blink
the eye misses the glint
In a blink 
no more fence
just a mask of
soldiers standing tall
to attention

Like a white picket fence
the wood a defence
marking a space
marking the grave
calling our attention
to the co-existence
of light and shadow

The shadows not first noticed
stretched out like death in a line
eluding to the dark side of life
hidden by the mask of sunshine
the eye drawn away  
from the dread 
of the black marks in the earth

A place held in the recess of hearts
a path not to tread
the path of suffering 
of tears, of cries, 
to the insanity of it all

This life
co-existing good and bad
white and black
a white picket fence and dark shadows
two faces, two sides, two masks
two of us inside
the good the evil
the angel and the devil

Focus away and see the light
the brilliance of the sun
and purple hues glinting
the eye catches and holds
yet can't quite  erase, diminish
the shadows from the corner
of the eye

Don't fret
the light diminishes the dark
the soldiers stand guard
eternal warriors
a battle fought and won
good over evil
a war raging on

Soldiers standing 
in a row to attention
or was it
a white picket fence...



linking with dVerse Poetics

40 comments:

  1. whew....nice....love what you did with the fence...the contrast in the light and dark...and turning them to soldiers...i think each of us carries a bit of each in us...that is for sure...and the capability as well to bring out either...

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    1. Hello Brian, thank you for your kind and encouraging comment. I agree we do have the capability to bring out either side and that is a scary thing but can be a beautiful thing to. Smiles.

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  2. Very cool! Your ability to visualize things is amazing!

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    1. Sunny, you made me laugh with your "cool" it is something I would say, lol. Thank you and also thank you for your kind words Sunny, I appreciate it.

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  3. Lovely! I love the contrast of the dark and light. You have a gift!

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    1. Thank you Tina for saying you think I have a gift. I am always humbled and amazed that people like what I write. Smiles.

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  4. You are so creative Behind the Smile... you find things where other people don't look:)

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    1. Launna, thank you, as always you bless me with your gracious words. Smiles.

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  5. I really admire your writing. I'm intrigued by your mind and your ablility to see and write, the thoughtfulness of it all -the dream behind it all that comes out of you and onto paper.

    What a God gift it is!
    Blessings, Deanna

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    1. Deanna, I am so touched by your gracious and very kind comment, thank you. It certainly is a gift from God and I am amazed myself at times and humbled that people like what is written. Blessings.

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  6. wow. you pulled so much from that image and brought it to life so beautifully. the struggle between good and evil, light and dark.... nicely done!

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    1. Hello RMP, thank you so much for your kind comment :-)

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  7. This shows me that my talent is not in writing poems. I could never of come up with these wonderful words. Thank you always for sharing your heart. Blessings.

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    1. JBR you give me such encouragement, bless you for that because to be honest I am always amazed anyone likes what I have written. I never know what words are going to flow from the pen but I keep going until no more come and then cringing a little I post it. Smiles.

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    2. Same with me. If my blogs flows freely without struggle, I know it is the Spirit. Blessings.

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  8. Thanks so much for sharing this poem which pictures to controversy of good and bad of hope and losing hope in our lives.

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    1. Thank you Beth, it is a constant battle isn't it of good/bad and holding onto hope. Smiles.

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  9. he light diminishes the dark
    the soldiers stand guard

    That really is beautiful. A white picket fence... I will never look at it quite the same way again.

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    1. Thank you Margaret. I won't look the same way at a white picket fence either :-)

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  10. I am with Margaret...I will never look at a white picket fence the same...this is beautiful! :-)

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    1. Thank you Carrie, I appreciate your kind comment. Smiles.

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  11. This poem slowly reeled me in as I read. At first it seems pretty straight-forward - then the narrator steps back and allows us to see an alternate reality, so much broader that first glance.......then you touch on human nature, widen the scope even more, and bring us home with hope, and with warriors winning the battle of good over evil. A surprising and really effective piece.

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    1. Thank you Sherry I appreciate your analysis and your comment.

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  12. When prompted you deliver. Well done!

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    1. Thank you Raining Iguanas, I feel encouraged :-)

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  13. It's so interesting how light can change shapes and the perception changes...nice.

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    1. That's so true Katy and I think of when places even rooms that we are familiar with change in the dark and can become unfamiliar. Thank you for your comment. Smiles.

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  14. I like the way you saw the white picket fence as a row of soldiers: guarding and keeping boundaries intact.

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    1. Thank you Kerry, I appreciate your comment. Smiles.

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  15. Your interpretation of the picket fence photo is lovely. Good vs. Evil. Dark vs. Light. It's everything we live with every day. I'm always hoping light and love win. Smiles.

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    1. I always hope the same Michele that even when it does not feel like it light, love and hope win. Smiles.

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  16. The analogy is fantastic and hs alot of punch with repetition. I love the play on god and bad. light and dark, and I especially like the line "stretched out like death in a line"...great visual. Loved it.

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    1. Thank you Herotomost for your insight and encouraging words. Smiles.

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  17. Oh...the imagery...you should write more poems captured from photos and paintings! This is thus far, my favorite poem by you!!! :)
    I love the way you tie soldiers and dark and light and evil and good. So beautiful and inspirational!!

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    1. Thank you Dionne. I had never thought of using a picture before to prompt a poem but I enjoyed giving it a go. I don't really see myself as a poet but when I write it just seems to come out that way. I will give it another go at some point. :-)

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  18. I like the contrast too and use of the picket fence as soldiers ~ Good weaving of words and pleased to meet you ~

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    1. Pleased to meet you Heaven. Thank you for your encouraging words. Smiles.

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  19. powerfully written and I like the analogy....You know how to spin words so incredibly

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    1. Thank you Sarah (Nikki) I appreciate your kind words :-)

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  20. Great post, I really love reading on your post, i am looking forward to read more blog from you soon.

    White Picket Fences

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